I finished edits on Sonata 9, and after yesterday’s dark departure in plot-bunny land, I cracked open Four-Kings to write some dialogue. Today I’m building Chapter 17 – the night Tolek Zawadzki and Jakub Sorkin hook up, but before that happens, they run into each other on the mountain. Both are former HS rugby players (rival teams) who find themselves at the same ski resort after graduating…
The chapter occurs from Wad’s perspective, so we never know what Jake is thinking – but we know from a previous chapter that Jake is looking to score. As far as Wad is concerned, the petite blond just wants to learn how to snowboard. Writing comedy isn’t really my thing, but I’m getting good at it and enjoying myself.
Dialogue sheet under the cut:
WAD RETURNS TO HIGHER GROUND AND NOTICES LESS PEOPLE THAN BEFORE – HE CHECKS HIS WATCH AND FINDS IT’S MIDNIGHT. THE COLD FEELS AMAZING AND THE MOON IS FULL. [DESCRIBE THE SCENE]
S: Hey, Wad
W: What’s up, Sorkin?
S: You and I, apparently.
W: That board still has the price tag on it.
S: I just bought it.
W: You shred?
S: You know I don’t. But you’re going to teach me.
W: Cut the shit, Sorkin. I’ve seen you skateboard.
WAD RECALLS FIRST TIME HE SAW JAKE AT A SKATE-PARK IN HAZELWOOD. THE HANDSOME BOY IS A TONY-HAWK LEVEL SKATER. [DESCRIBE THE SCENE]
S: That’s wheels on concrete. Man-made surfaces support us even if they don’t want to. Snow is different. It’s chaotic. It supports no one.
W: That’s some deep shit, Sorkin.
S: So is this snow, and you’re going to teach me to surf it.
W SLIDES AWAY: There’s a bunny hill over there, just duck the rope and don’t get caught.
S: You’re going leave me out here, alone? That’s some weak sauce.
W SLIDES BACK AROUND: I ain’t Mister Miyagi, man.
S: No, but you’re a boarder and I’d like to be, so get over yourself and teach me.
W: Lock your boots.
S: Knock my what?
W (SMILES) You heard what I said.
JAKE STEPS INTO THE BOARD’S FOOT BRACES AND THEN SECURES THEM.
S: Can’t we just ride this slope?
W: Bunny hill is safer.
S: That’s where the kids ski.
W: What’s your skill level?
S: Minus zero, I guess.
W: That’s why you can’t bomb this powder.
S: I’m going to fall on my face, and it’s going to hurt.
W: You won’t fall. First step is balance, and like I said, I seen you skateboard.
S: Hey Wad, what were you doing in Hazelwood that day anyway?
W: Hanging with a friend of a friend.
S: I saw you guys with the betty’s near the gate. Who was dating who?
W: Ratliff wanted to hook up with Irina Jellico.
S: I like Irina, she’s cool.
W: Yeah, too cool for Ivan.
LAUGHTER
W: Hey, I’m sorry for that shit Boyce was talking.
S: I handled it.
W: Yeah, you did.
S: He’s not the first fucktard I’ve ever dealt with, and he won’t be the last.
W: How long did it take for you to skate like that?
S: I’ve been on a skateboard since the fifth grade.
W: You been queer since then, too?
S: Maybe. Can I ask you something else?
W: No, I wasn’t out to my friends last year.
S: I’m shocked. I mean, your eyes spent a lot of time on me that day.
W: Your skating impressed me.
JAKE AWKWARDLY SCOOTS OVER TO WAD AND GETS CLOSE.
S: Just my boarding?
WAD IS UNMOVED AND PLAYS IT COOL.
W: Tip off with a crouch, and balance as you coast.
JAKE STARTS DOWN THE INCLINE BUT FALLS FORWARD AT THE END.
W: You good?
S: Do I look good?
W: You’ve looked better.
S: Get over here and help me up!
WAD SMILES AND SURFS DOWN TO HIM. HE YANKS JAKE UP BY GRABBING HIS SUIT NEAR THE SMALL OF HIS BACK.
S: Face-planting here is way nicer than eating concrete.
W: I guess the snow ain’t that unsupportive.
S: I picked up surfing waves way easier than this.
W: Not every virgin run is a success.
S: Aw. Was your first that bad, Wad?
W: Don’t a be a wiseass.
S: Better than being a dumbass.
W: You’re ranking in both brackets right now.
S: There’s always a place for the smartest dumbass, Wad.
Guns, Guys, & Yaoi 2.0 